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You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The table shows information about metro systems in six different cities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The table shows information about metro systems in six different cities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
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The table gives
the
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information on the underground train system in six capital cities around the world with
the
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a
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 breakdown
on
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 the figures
of
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 lines and length,
as well as
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 the annual revenue and the cost of tickets.
Overall
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, we can see that the situation varies from country to country. New York City
Subway
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, London Tube and Beijing
Subway
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 have the longest underground systems out of the six cities
which
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each approximately over 250 miles.
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, the total length of
Tokyo
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the Tokyo
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Subway
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, Paris Metro and Mexico City Metro
are
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 less than 200 miles. In terms of revenue, Tokyo
Subway
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 and Beijing
Subway
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has
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 the highest
profit
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profits
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, which doubled those from the other four countries, at 3.1
billions
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billion
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 US dollars and 3.6
billions
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billion
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 respectively.
However
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, interestingly, the cost of
single
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a single
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 ticket for these two cities
are
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is
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 quite low ($1.64 in Tokyo and $0.45 in Beijing) compared to $2.50 in New York and $2.3 in Paris.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words subway with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • ridership
  • stations
  • advanced technology
  • underground network
  • busiest metro systems
  • route length
  • extensive system
  • passenger volume
  • modern systems
  • historical development
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