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The graphs below show the number of public transit passengers from 1989 to 2009 and bus and tram passenger numbers between 2000 and 2009 in Melbourne.

The graphs below show the number of public transit passengers from 1989 to 2009 and bus and tram passenger numbers between 2000 and 2009 in Melbourne.
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The
first
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 line graph indicates public transportation user
numbers
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 between 1989 and 2009 and the second one shows the number of bus and
tram
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passengers
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 from 2000 to 2008 in Melbourne.
According to
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 the
first
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 graph,
it is clear that
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 the number of public transit
passengers
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 went up continuously over the 20-year period. About 290
million
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 people in Melbourne consistently used public transport for the
first
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 five years and
then
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 public transport passenger
numbers
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 gradually grew. Since 2004, it has seen a rapid increase to nearly 500
million
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. In the second graph, it is apparent that even though bus and
tram
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 passenger
numbers
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 reached over 200
million
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 in the final year in Melbourne, their patterns of change were significantly different. The number of bus
passengers
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 remained stable for the
first
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 three years,
however
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, it constantly ascended until 2008
while
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 that of
tram
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passengers
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 fluctuated several times.
Tram
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 user
numbers
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 went up slightly before falling in 2004. After that, they sharply soared by over 70
million
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 between 2007 and 2008.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words first, numbers, tram, passengers, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "went up" was used 2 times.
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