IELTS Writing Correction Service
Writing Samples
Band 6.5

The bar charts below give information on the road transport in a number of European countries.

The bar charts below give information on the road transport in a number of European countries.
The bar chart illustrates the data proportion of transport which is running on the road in Europe by
comapring
Correct your spelling
comparing
competing
 in three types of transporting.
Overall
Linking Words
, compared
from
Change preposition
to
show examples
 the information by countries,
travel
Use synonyms
person
Change preposition
by person
show examples
 by car and commuting time
which
Correct pronoun usage
apply
show examples
are
high
Correct word choice
higher
show examples
level
Use synonyms
 than
travel
Use synonyms
person
Change preposition
by person
show examples
 by bus,
trains
Fix the agreement mistake
train
show examples
 and
others
Correct quantifier usage
other
show examples
. To start with,
travel
Use synonyms
 person by car, the data shown by
killometres
Correct your spelling
kilometres
 per year, Which
is
Correct subject-verb agreement
are
show examples
two
Correct article usage
the two
show examples
 nations are highest, Denmark and France. In the
mean time
Correct your spelling
meantime
show examples
 Itay,
United
Correct article usage
the United
show examples
 Kingdom and
Eu
Correct your spelling
Europe
show examples
 average are
stadily
Correct your spelling
still
in
Change preposition
at
show examples
 the same average
level
Use synonyms
, despite Germany and Spain
were
Wrong verb form
being
show examples
 the lowest
level
Use synonyms
.
In
Change preposition
On
show examples
 the other hand
travel
Use synonyms
 by bus, Train, and
others
Correct quantifier usage
other
show examples
. Denmark
was reach
Change the verb form
was reached
was reaching
show examples
 on top of
this
Linking Words
 data, In spite of that other
nation
Fix the agreement mistake
nations
show examples
 were almost
in
Change preposition
at
show examples
th
Correct your spelling
the
 same
level
Use synonyms
.
However
Linking Words
, all
mode
Fix the agreement mistake
modes
show examples
 in both
way
Change to a plural noun
ways
show examples
 Germany and
UK
Correct article usage
the UK
show examples
spending
Wrong verb form
spend
show examples
 45
minutes
Use synonyms
in
Change preposition
on
show examples
 average for travelling and Denmark and France spend around 40
minutes
Use synonyms
. Spain and
Correct article usage
the Eu
show examples
Eu Average
Correct your spelling
European average
show examples
 are
the
Change preposition
at the
show examples
 same
level
Use synonyms
 which
are
Correct subject-verb agreement
is
show examples
 spending 30
minutes
Use synonyms
 each day
for
Change preposition
apply
show examples
travelling and Italy
waas
Correct your spelling
is
only
Correct article usage
the only
show examples
one
Correct pronoun usage
apply
show examples
country that
spending
Wrong verb form
spends
show examples
 20
minutes
Use synonyms
 on the road for
tranporting
Correct your spelling
travelling
.

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site's author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
▼
Vocabulary: Replace the words travel, level, minutes with synonyms.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 3 times.
▼
Topic Vocabulary:
  • volume of road transport
  • economic activity
  • population density
  • infrastructure quality
  • traffic congestion
  • environmental pollution
  • road safety
  • policies or measures
  • public transport
  • road improvements
  • emissions regulations
What to do next:
Look at other essays: