The chart below shows global sales of the top five mobile phone brands between 2009 and 2013. Write a report for a university, lecturer describing the information shown below.

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The provided chart indicates different global sales of the

cell

phone brands from 2009 to 2013.

Overall

Samsung

and

Nokia

sell the most among 5 brands which are

Samsung

, Apple,

Nokia

, LG and ZTE.

Nokia

sold more

cell

phones

than

Samsung

in 2009 and 2011 but

Samsung

exported more them than

Nokia

in 2013. Looking at the bar graph more closely,

Samsung

sold

cell

phones

about 240

million

in 2009 and grew

Change preposition

apply

show examples

gradually until 2013. On

Correct article usage

the contray

show examples

contray

Correct your spelling

contrary

Nokia

exported mobile

phones

accounted for 430

million

in 2009 and

420millons

Correct your spelling

420 million

in 2011 and suddenly decreased

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show examples

250millions in 2013. As indicated,

ZTE

Correct article usage

the ZTE

show examples

brand sold

phones

evenly from 2009 to 2013 about 50

million

Simillary

Correct your spelling

Similarly

, Apple

also

exported increasingly in the same period with 20

million

in 2009 and 150

million

in 2013. LG exported 110

millon

Correct your spelling

million

cell

phone

Fix the agreement mistake

phones

show examples

in 2009 and slinked slightly

accounted

Wrong verb form

accounting

show examples

for 80

millon

Correct your spelling

million

in 2013.

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Linking words
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

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Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

151 words

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