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The charts bellow give information about travel to and from UK, and about the most popular countries for UK residents to visit.

The charts bellow give information about travel to and from UK, and about the most popular countries for UK residents to visit.
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Chart one contains detailed data about
millions
 of
UK
residents
visit to
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visiting
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 various
countries
as well as
 other nationalities or
residents
visited
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who visited
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to
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the
UK
in
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apply
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between the years 1979 to 1994. Chart 2 illustrates the information about the
millions
 of
UK
 people
visited
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who visited
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to
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apply
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the most popular
countries
 in the world
by
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in
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 1999. From the
year
 1979 to 1984, only about 12 to 20
million
UK
 citizens visited
to
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apply
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various
countries
.
Further
, after five years the number reached
to
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apply
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30
millions
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million
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.
Subsequently
, the
millions
 of
UK
residents
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who visted
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visted
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visited
 to the overseas
countries
gradully
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gradually
 increased by 45
million
 in the
year
 1994 and more than 50
million
 by the
year
 1999. Interestingly, almost 12
million
of
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apply
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UK
residents
 preferred to
visit
 France, and,
secondly
, they picked
up
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apply
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Spain as the most suitable to
visit
 with nearly about 8
million
 people.
Further
, the USA, Greece and Turkey were
in
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apply
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a
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the
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 least priority
to
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for
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 the
UK
 people to
visit
. Like the
UK
 citizens, other nationalities were
also
 visited to the
UK
 from the
year
 1979 to 1999.
However
, compared with the
UK
 visitors, the
millions
 of overseas
residents
 visited to the
UK
 is half of that only i.e., 28
miilion
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million
.
Overall
,
UK
 citizens or
residents
 prefer to
visit
 other
countries
 was more
due to
 multiple reasons and most of them interested
to go
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in
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 Frane and Spain.
Whereas
, the other
countries
 didn't give much priority to
see
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seeing
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 the
UK
.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "further".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words millions, uk, residents, visit, countries, year, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 4 times.
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