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The charts bellow give information about travel to and from UK, and about the most popular countries for UK residents to visit.

The charts bellow give information about travel to and from UK, and about the most popular countries for UK residents to visit.
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Chart one contains detailed data about
millions
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 of
UK
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residents
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visit to
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visiting
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 various
countries
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as well as
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 other nationalities or
residents
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visited
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who visited
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to
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apply
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the
UK
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in
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between the years 1979 to 1994. Chart 2 illustrates the information about the
millions
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 of
UK
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 people
visited
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who visited
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to
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the most popular
countries
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 in the world
by
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in
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 1999. From the
year
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 1979 to 1984, only about 12 to 20
million
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UK
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 citizens visited
to
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various
countries
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.
Further
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, after five years the number reached
to
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30
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millions
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million
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.
Subsequently
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, the
millions
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 of
UK
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residents
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who visted
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visted
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visited
 to the overseas
countries
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gradully
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gradually
 increased by 45
million
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 in the
year
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 1994 and more than 50
million
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 by the
year
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 1999. Interestingly, almost 12
million
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of
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apply
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UK
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residents
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 preferred to
visit
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 France, and,
secondly
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, they picked
up
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apply
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Spain as the most suitable to
visit
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 with nearly about 8
million
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 people.
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, the USA, Greece and Turkey were
in
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apply
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a
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the
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 least priority
to
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for
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 the
UK
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 people to
visit
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. Like the
UK
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 citizens, other nationalities were
also
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 visited to the
UK
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 from the
year
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 1979 to 1999.
However
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, compared with the
UK
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 visitors, the
millions
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 of overseas
residents
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 visited to the
UK
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 is half of that only i.e., 28
miilion
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million
.
Overall
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,
UK
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 citizens or
residents
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 prefer to
visit
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 other
countries
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 was more
due to
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 multiple reasons and most of them interested
to go
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in
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 Frane and Spain.
Whereas
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, the other
countries
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 didn't give much priority to
see
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seeing
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 the
UK
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.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "further".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words millions, uk, residents, visit, countries, year, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 4 times.
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