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The graph below shows the rate of smoking per 1000 people in Someland from 1960 to 2000. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information in the graph below.

The graph below shows the rate of smoking per 1000 people in Someland from 1960 to 2000. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information in the graph below.
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The presented line graph gives information about the rate of utilizing
smokes
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smoke
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 per one thousand
individiuals
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individuals
 in Someland
during
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over
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 40 years. at
the
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first glance, it seems that using smokes of wales had decreased moderately,
while
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 the number of females who
was
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were
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 smoking
had
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jumped rapidly in the first fifteen years
Bacu
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According
 to the details, in 1960, the amount of
smokes
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smoking
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 had
picu
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a picu
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 point for men,
whereas
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this
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 data for women was very low. From the
picu
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picture
 point of the variety of smokes
which
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used by women, had declined
the
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over the
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 next 25 years. The rate of smoking per 1000 men, which had dropped during the given period, and the amount of smoking per 1000 females was equal point approximately in 2000.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "gives" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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