Some people say that the governments should pay for health care and education but others think that this is not the govrnment's reseponsibility. Discuss both these views and give your opinion.
Things
that should be covered by government
or Correct article usage
the government
public
are discussed at the moment. Correct article usage
the public
While
some individuals argue that the
Correct article usage
apply
health
protection and education
are not the governments
responsibility, I side with those who believe that those Change to a genitive case
government's
governments'
things
should be controlled by the governments
.
On the one hand, it could be argued that medical Fix the agreement mistake
government
management
and education
should covered by people
themselves because it could pose one challenge. As we know that
not all Correct word choice
apply
people
are well payed
. Correct your spelling
paid
Consequently
, covering the
Correct article usage
apply
health
care and education
will make their expenses rising
, and it would Wrong verb form
rise
made
their daily groceries hardly Change the verb form
be made
make
be
fulfilled. To illustrate, when Unnecessary verb
apply
family
member from Add an article
a family
lower
Correct article usage
a lower
income
suddenly on sickness
Replace the word
sick
at the end
of month, it can be a disaster for them as the money acoount
is less than the invoice Correct your spelling
account
of
Change preposition
for
healthy
service since the family salary Replace the word
health
already
used for daily groceries Add a missing verb
is already
in
the start or middle date of the month.
Change preposition
at
On the other hand
, I believe with those who think that wellness program
and Fix the agreement mistake
programs
education
should be managed by the governments for two main reasons. Firstly
, those things
understandable
not to be charged to the Add a missing verb
are understandable
people
as people
already pay for taxes. The authority of government
should Add an article
a government
managed
the Change the verb form
manage
income
from people
taxes to Change noun form
people's
covered
Wrong verb form
cover
health
care and education
as income
from their people
could be best when it serve back to them. Secondly
, if the medical management
and education
are well manage
by the authority, they can Change the verb form
are well managed
planning
to enhance the quality of public Change the verb form
plan
be planning
health
and education
easily. The importance of public health
and education
should be hardly fought by government
as those can bring so Add an article
the government
much
advantages in the future. To represent, the good medical Change the quantifier
many
management
in Singapore allow
many Change the verb form
allows
people
from neighbour
Replace the word
neighbouring
country
Fix the agreement mistake
countries
such
as Indonesia to go to
there when they Remove the preposition
apply
got
Wrong verb form
get
illness
. Add an article
an illness
the illness
Thus
in therefore
, the Add the comma(s)
, therefore
income
from medical treatment in Singapore had a
increase not only from local Change the article
an
people
,
but Remove the comma
apply
also
from foreign.
In conclusion, while
some people
can pay the medical management
and education
by themselves, I remain firmly convinced that those things
should be managed by the government
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grammar
Try to proofread your essay to avoid minor grammatical errors and typos like "govrnment" (should be "government"), "are not the governments responsibility" (should be "are not the government's responsibility"), and "a disaster for them as the money acoount" (should be "a disaster for them as the money account").
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Aim to develop your arguments further by providing more specific and vivid examples. Your examples are relevant but could be expanded to make them more compelling.
language use
Improve sentence variety to enhance readability and engagement. Avoid repetitive sentence structures and try to use a mix of simple, compound, and complex sentences.
structure
You clearly present both viewpoints and offer your own opinion, which is crucial for a complete task response.
structure
The introduction and conclusion are present and clear, effectively framing your essay.
content
You make a logical argument as to why the government should handle health care and education.
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