Topic: The pie chart gives information on UAE government spending in 2000. The total budget was AED 315 billion.

Topic: The pie chart gives information on UAE government spending in 2000. The total budget was AED 315 billion.
The supplied pie chart illustrates some data about where the government budget (AED 315
billion
) was spent during 2000 in UAE. 
Overall
, there were 10 sections for spending the budget with social security being the most remarkable in the pie chart. As can be seen, approximately
one third
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of the money was expended
for
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on
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social security,
while
both transport and industry, agriculture and employment contained only 9 and 17
billion
respectively which were the least part of the chart. It is clearly shown that
,
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53
billion
of
budget
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the budget
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was for health and personal social services.
Furthermore
, 15
billion
was consumed for housing heritage and
environment
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the environment
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.
Similarly
, law and order experienced the same pattern with only
2
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a 2
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billion
increase compared with housing heritage and environment.
Additionally
, the amount of debt interest was 23
billion
as same as other
expenditure
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expenditures
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. Generally speaking,
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the defense’s
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defense’s
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defense
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section was 22
billion
.
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