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Art classes, such as painting and drawing, are as important to a child's development as other subjects, so it should be compulsory in high schools. To what extent do you agree or disagree.

#art #classes #child #development #subjects #schools
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, painting or drawing to the children’s development like other subjects and it should be compulsory in high schools.
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 it can have on
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 like stress release or
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 creativity in other subjects.
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physic
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,
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 need a place to rest after these
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classes
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 the best option for them.
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 to release all their stress.
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 a lovely painting can
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 them to study more.
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classes
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 to rest and
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. Another benefit is the improvement of
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creativity in
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students
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mindset
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. With these
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classes
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 in their schedule,
student
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 will be able to improve their creativity, which is helpful for their mind to solve many problems in
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have passion
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 about many subjects like
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port portion
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classes
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 have been increasing clearly compare to the
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 to years. In conclusion, having
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 student release their stress after many
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 make
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 be creative in other
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coherence cohesion
To enhance your essay's coherence and cohesion, ensure that each paragraph sticks more clearly to one main idea. Include clear topic sentences and ensure your ideas flow logically from one to the next.
task achievement
Work on providing more comprehensive and relevant examples to support your points. Using specific examples or case studies can strengthen your arguments considerably.
task achievement
Your essay presents a complete response to the task, covering different aspects of the topic, including stress release and improvement of creativity.
coherence cohesion
You successfully include an introduction and a conclusion in your essay, which helps frame the argument and summarily express your viewpoint.

Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.

Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

Here are examples of instructions that require you to give your opinion:

...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • enhances
  • creativity
  • imagination
  • innovatively
  • curriculum
  • mental health
  • emotional expression
  • stress relief
  • critical thinking
  • problem-solving skills
  • creatively
  • cultural diversity
  • artistic traditions
  • compulsory
  • well-rounded education
  • academic performance
  • concentrate
  • attention to detail
  • persevere
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