Art classes, such as painting and drawing, are as important to a child's development as other subjects, so it should be compulsory in high schools. To what extent do you agree or disagree.

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, painting or drawing to the children’s development like other subjects and it should be compulsory in high schools.
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it can have on
students
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creativity in other subjects.
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classes
like
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,
students
need a place to rest after these
classes
and
art
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,
art
classes
can be a perfect place for
students
to release all their stress.
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a lovely painting can
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them to study more.
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Japan have
art
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students
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for the next
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. Another benefit is the improvement of
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creativity in
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. With these
art
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in their schedule,
student
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will be able to improve their creativity, which is helpful for their mind to solve many problems in
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which
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about many subjects like
math
,
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math
in the UK in 2017, the
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port portion
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students
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in
math
classes
have been increasing clearly compare to the
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student release their stress after many
classes
but
also
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make
students
be creative in other
classes
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • enhances
  • creativity
  • imagination
  • innovatively
  • curriculum
  • mental health
  • emotional expression
  • stress relief
  • critical thinking
  • problem-solving skills
  • creatively
  • cultural diversity
  • artistic traditions
  • compulsory
  • well-rounded education
  • academic performance
  • concentrate
  • attention to detail
  • persevere
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