Some people think it is more important to spend money on roads and motorways than on ublic transport systems such as railways and trams. To what extent do you agree and disagree?
Nowadays,
government
are using taxes to Fix the agreement mistake
governments
investing
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invest
on
Change preposition
in
road
and highways because Fix the agreement mistake
roads
its
may reduce the percentage of Change the pronoun
it
accident
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accidents
while
driving. I contend that investing on
Change preposition
in
public
Correct article usage
the public
transport
system can get many benefits about safety and friendly to the environment.
It is
should Unnecessary verb
apply
be acknowledge
that there are still some Change the verb form
be acknowledged
road
and highways that Fix the agreement mistake
roads
got
many holes Verb problem
have
may
get drivers into an accident Correct pronoun usage
that may
while
driving. For some reason, drivers shipping at night have many risky
Replace the word
risks
while
driving, there
are some Correct word choice
and there
range
of Fix the agreement mistake
ranges
road
that do not have Fix the agreement mistake
roads
lighter
Replace the word
light
such
as in the countryside. Moreover
, in
Change preposition
on
highways
there are no hospitals Add a comma
highways,
in
Change preposition
apply
an
Correct your spelling
and
accidents
got
Verb problem
apply
is
low. Correct subject-verb agreement
are
For example
, in UK
, where they have to go on the motorways usually the Correct article usage
the UK
amount
of Change the quantifier
number
accidents
during 2018 was 34% but after some development
the Add a comma
development,
amount
of Change the quantifier
number
accidents
reduce
to 30%.
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reduced
However
, there is an easy ways
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way
during
travel around the city or to another city Change preposition
to
is
public Unnecessary verb
apply
transport
. Using public transport
help
many Correct subject-verb agreement
helps
individulas
feel more safety than driving by themselves. Correct your spelling
individuals
For instance
, investing on
public Change preposition
in
transport
such
as railways and trams in Denmark make
citizens Correct subject-verb agreement
makes
using
it more frequently. Wrong verb form
use
As a result
, the number of accidents
have
a low Change the verb form
has
percent
Change the spelling
per cent
about
5% in 2020.
Change preposition
of about
Futhermore
, investing Correct your spelling
Furthermore
on
public Change preposition
in
transport
is more eco-friendly to
the environment. The gasoline from vehicles may Change preposition
for
saw
a reduction. Take Singapore as an example, almost Wrong verb form
see
there
citizens Correct your spelling
their
using
public Wrong verb form
use
transport
to travel to work and study. Consequently
, there are
no water pollution or air pollution in Correct subject-verb agreement
is
country
.
In conclusion, inventing Add an article
the country
on
motorways or Change preposition
apply
road
may reduce Fix the agreement mistake
roads
the
Correct article usage
apply
accident
but the benefits of public Fix the agreement mistake
accidents
transport
given is
more helpful. Verb problem
are
Hence
, investing on
public Change preposition
in
transport
can encourage many individuals to use it frequently helping to reduce accidents
and friendly
Add a missing verb
be friendly
with
the environment.Change preposition
to
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