Some people think it is more important to spend money on roads and motorways than on public transport systems. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?
Nowadays, it is claimed by individuals that money should be
usedfor
motorways and Correct your spelling
used for
roads
rather than public transport systems
. This
writer's opinion is that money should be spend
on Change the verb form
be spent
traffic
systems
due to
the safety
and environmental profits it can provide.
To begin
with,in
these days, Change preposition
apply
safety
is one of the priorities of society due to
th
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the
epeople's
concern about the increase of serious Correct your spelling
people's
accident
which not only affect Fix the agreement mistake
accidents
to
human well-being but Change preposition
apply
also
their life. his problem can be solved effectively by developing th
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the
etransport
system, using Correct your spelling
transport
high quality
materials and building more Add a hyphen
high-quality
roads
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road
traffic
Correct word choice
and traffic
structure
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structures
can
not only ensure people's Correct pronoun usage
that can
safety
but also
help the systems
work effectively. For example
, highest
quality fence can cope with tough Add an article
a highest
the highest
impact
from accidents and reduce the Fix the agreement mistake
impacts
consequence
.
Another people's Fix the agreement mistake
consequences
concerns
is the environment, which was affected negatively Fix the agreement mistake
concern
from
Change preposition
by
tranportation
. Correct your spelling
transportation
However
, pollutions were caused by an ineffective system,
and can be fixed by improving it. With more and more motorways, Remove the comma
apply
traffic
jams can be reduced, which is the main reasons
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reason
of
air Change preposition
for
pollutions
and noise pollution Fix the agreement mistake
pollution
reduced
effectively. Fumes Add a missing verb
being reduced
released
from cars when it Add a missing verb
are released
stucked
on the Correct your spelling
stuck
roads
. Additionally
, it also
helps individuals save time and bring some financial profits for the society. For example
, in 2018, after the traffic
development in Ho Chi Minh city
, Capitalize word
City
it
GDP that year increased by 2% and the air quality improved significantly by 10%.
Correct pronoun usage
its
To conclude
, improving traffic
systems
can help reducing
pollution effectively and Wrong verb form
reduce
also
ensuring
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ensure
people
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people's
safety
, due to
this
, it
is no doubt that spending Correct pronoun usage
there
moneys
on motorways and Change the wording
money
amounts of money
sums of money
roads
are
more crucial.Correct subject-verb agreement
is
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grammar
Ensure to use correct spelling and grammar, and avoid typographical errors. For example, 'spend' should be 'spent' and 'transportation' instead of 'tranportation'.
coherence
Provide a smooth transition between paragraphs to improve coherence. Use linking words/phrases like 'Moreover', 'Furthermore', 'In addition', etc.
task achievement
Each main point should be supported with more detailed and specific examples for better task achievement. Clearly elaborate on how improved roads directly lead to safety and environmental benefits.
task achievement
The essay presents a clear opinion on the topic and maintains it throughout.
coherence
The introduction and conclusion are present and aligned with the main arguments.
task achievement
The essay uses relevant examples to support its main points, such as the GDP increase in Ho Chi Minh City.
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