Some people think it is more important to spend money on roads and motorways than on public transport systems. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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Nowadays, it is claimed by individuals that money should be
usedfor
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used for
motorways and
roads
rather than public transport
systems
.
This
writer's opinion is that money should
be spend
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on
traffic
systems
due to
the
safety
and environmental profits it can provide.
To begin
with,
in
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these days,
safety
is one of the priorities of society
due to
th
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the
epeople's
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people's
concern about the increase of serious
accident
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which not only affect
to
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human well-being but
also
their life. his problem can be solved effectively by developing
th
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the
etransport
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transport
system, using
high quality
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high-quality
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materials and building more
roads
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road
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traffic
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and traffic
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structure
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can
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not only ensure people's
safety
but
also
help the
systems
work effectively.
For example
,
highest
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a highest
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quality fence can cope with tough
impact
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impacts
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from accidents and reduce the
consequence
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consequences
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. Another people's
concerns
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concern
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is the environment, which was affected negatively
from
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tranportation
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transportation
.
However
, pollutions were caused by an ineffective system
,
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and can be fixed by improving it. With more and more motorways,
traffic
jams can be reduced, which is the main
reasons
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reason
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of
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for
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air
pollutions
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pollution
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and noise pollution
reduced
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effectively. Fumes
released
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from cars when it
stucked
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stuck
on the
roads
.
Additionally
, it
also
helps individuals save time and bring some financial profits for the society.
For example
, in 2018, after the
traffic
development in Ho Chi Minh
city
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,
it
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GDP that year increased by 2% and the air quality improved significantly by 10%.
To conclude
, improving
traffic
systems
can help
reducing
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pollution effectively and
also
ensuring
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people
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safety
,
due to
this
,
it
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there
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is no doubt that spending
moneys
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money
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on motorways and
roads
are
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is
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more crucial.
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grammar
Ensure to use correct spelling and grammar, and avoid typographical errors. For example, 'spend' should be 'spent' and 'transportation' instead of 'tranportation'.
coherence
Provide a smooth transition between paragraphs to improve coherence. Use linking words/phrases like 'Moreover', 'Furthermore', 'In addition', etc.
task achievement
Each main point should be supported with more detailed and specific examples for better task achievement. Clearly elaborate on how improved roads directly lead to safety and environmental benefits.
task achievement
The essay presents a clear opinion on the topic and maintains it throughout.
coherence
The introduction and conclusion are present and aligned with the main arguments.
task achievement
The essay uses relevant examples to support its main points, such as the GDP increase in Ho Chi Minh City.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Infrastructure
  • Transportation
  • Congestion
  • Economy
  • Carbon emissions
  • Pollution
  • Social inclusion
  • Urban development
  • Efficient
  • Investment
  • Reliance
  • Boosting
  • Affordable
  • Private vehicle users
  • Public transport system
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