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The table below shows the income and expenditure of Harckley Hall, a public place for hiring over the period of three years. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below shows the income and expenditure of Harckley Hall, a public place for hiring over the period of three years. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given table illustrates the earnings and
spendings
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spending
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 of a public place named Harckey
hall
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Hall
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 for hiring for 3 years.
Overall
, it can be seen that total the
income
 has
been
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decreased by the third
year
 and the expenditure has
been
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increased. In the first
year
, the
income
 of
hiring
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the hiring
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 room is 33000
euros
, and
than
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then
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 it has been increased a bit to 32000
euros
 by the third
year
;
however
, the cafe
income
 is 3000
euros
, but
than
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then
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 it has been increased by 2000
euros
 in the
year
 3.
Moreover
, funding from
local
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the local
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 council is consistent for the first 2 years and is 20,000
euros
;
whereas
, it has been decreased to 15,000 in
the
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year
 3.
In addition
, funding from other bodies has
been
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slipped by 2000
euros
 over the passage of time and comes to 20,000 in both
the
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year
 2 and
year
 3, so the total
income
 from all the sources has
been
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decreased and is 71000
euros
 in
the
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year
 3, which was 75000
euros
 in the
year
 1;
whereas
; the expenditure has been increased from 66000
euros
 to 71,000
euros
 , and
this
 makes
income
 and expenditure exactly to the same amount.
Moreover
, the profit has
been plummeted
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plummeted
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 to 1000
euros
 from 9000
euros
 in the
year
 3.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words income, year, euros with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 4 times.
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