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The graph below shows the production levels of the main kinds of fuel in the UK between 1981 and 2000. Summarize the formation by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the production levels of the main kinds of fuel in the UK between 1981 and 2000. Summarize the formation by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given line graph illustrates the production rates of three major types of
energy
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 sources, namely
petroleum
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, coal, and natural
gas
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 from 1981 to 2000 in the UK. The data
measured
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 in
energy
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units
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, and one
energy
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 unit equals
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energy
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the energy
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that
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generated by one million tonnes of oil. From an
overall
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 perspective, it is evident that the generation of
and
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natural
gas
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 showed an upward trend,
whereas
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 a reverse pattern could be seen in the figure for coal over the years shown.
In addition
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,
petroleum
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 was a main source during that time.
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 the beginning of the period, the manufacturing of
petroleum
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 was highest, at about 90
units
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. The data on
on
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coal was lower, at about 80
units
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. Meanwhile, natural
gas
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 accounted for the lowest number, just nearly 40
units
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. In the following years, the power
was
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provided by
petroleum
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 increased sharply to 140
units
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 in 1984. After remaining the same number until 1987, the figure for
petroleum
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 considerably dropped to about 100
units
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 in 1990.
However
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, it recovered to 140
units
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 in 1995 and stayed stable at that value to the
last
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 year.
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, there was a stabilisation in coal provision at 40
units
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 from 1981 to 1990 before steadily rising to reach a peak at approximately 100
units
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 in 2000.
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, the data on natural
gas
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 underwent a significant decrease to just under 40
units
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 in 1984. After rising to around 60
units
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 in 1986, the manufacturing of coal gradually declined to around 30
units
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at the end
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 of the period.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words energy, petroleum, gas, units with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • production levels
  • fuel types
  • trend
  • fluctuating
  • dominant
  • period
  • rise
  • decline
  • context
  • spikes
  • drops
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