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in the past people used to travel abroad to look for many difference from their home countr/Nowadays cities throughout the world are becoming more and more similar. what are the reasons. do the advenyages outweight disadventages

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Be millennium, people used to travel in order to compare their hometowns with foreign
countries
. Today they will not be able to do it with the same aim, since monopolies become similar.It is wrong
due to
 the
globalization
 and social networking system. The main disadvantage is that
countries
 are losing their own aesthetic sides at all. The main reason of
this
 challenge is the international
globalization
. In order to be equal in all general aspects
such
 as economy, commerce, level of life e.d. nations have decided to keep with
this
 strategy.
Moreover
, by watching the lifestyle of others through networks, inhabitants of each country tend to copy their quality of life.
For example
, in Uzbekistan, youth try to keep with Korean adults’
view
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views
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 on life
as well as
 fashion style.
On the contrary
 older want to have similar technology growth and economy.
Therefore
,
globalization
 and social networks have contributed us to being similar. By taking all sides into account, cons outweigh prone. There will not be colouring between
countries
 , which used to be curiosity for everyone. It will damage tourism, which is the main income in most
countries
such
 as the USA.
Moreover
, they will forget about themselves as a nation with their custom and religion.
For instance
: South American
countries
 have lost 20 per cent of their tourist, since they
develop
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as well as
 America,which means that they do not have their festivals and things like
this
.
Therefore
, If we do not stop it,
countries
 will
be lost
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lose
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 their own traditions. In conclusion ,
although
 it will lead us to
globalization
 ,it will damage on nation's culture and percentage of tourists.
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