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The graph below shows the consumption of fish and some different kinds of meat in an European country bbetween 1979 and 2004

The graph below shows the consumption of fish and some different kinds of meat in an European country bbetween 1979 and 2004
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The rate of average weekly
consumption
 of fish and other types of meat by individuals from 1997 to 2004 in
an
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Euroupean
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European
 country
in
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is
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 illustrated in the line
graph
.
overall
,
it is clear that
consumption
 of
beef
 has experienced the most changes
in contrast
 to fish which experienced a roughly constant figure. Broadly speaking, throughout
this
 25-year period,
the
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meat
consumption
 showed a
dereasing
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decreasing
 pattern with
chicken
beingg
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being
 an
exceptiion
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exception
 with a gradual growth to a peak in 2004. There is
also
 a
parallal
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parallel
 fall between the
ussage og
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usage of
 lamb and
Beef
 reaching 100 and 150 od grams of weekly
consumption
 by the end of the
graph
 respectively. Looking into detail,
it is clear that
 the average use of
chicken
 has crossed other types of meat
in
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 two points of the
graph
. The first
being
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 in 1979 when
chicken
 and lamb had an equal usage of 150 grams and the other in 1989 when the
consumption
 rate of
chivken
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chicken
chickens
 meets the rate of
beef
 at 200 grams, right
after
this
 point of the
graph
chicken
 and
beef
 share a short period of almost equal rates with slight differences.
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