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The Graph Below Shows The Average Number Of Vietnamese Students Studying In France, America And Russia Between 2000 And 2015

The Graph Below Shows The Average Number Of Vietnamese Students Studying In France, America And Russia Between 2000 And 2015
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graph
 provides information about the number of Vietnamese
students
 who visited France, America, and Russia for study purposes over 15 years period.
Overall
, it can be observed that the US
students
 enjoyed a significant rise,
while
Russia
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students
 contrary witnessed a huge drop.
To begin
 with, despite the initial number of 1,5
million
 in 2000, the number of Vietnamese
students
 in America increased to 2
million
 in 2005 and 3
million
 in 2010, before reaching the highest point at 5
million
 in 2015.
In contrast
, the proportion of foreign
students
 in Russia started
with
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 about 3
million
,
however
, it
then
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 followed by a remarkable decrease in 2005 and 2010 ( nearly 2
million
).
Nevertheless
, the line showed unpredictable growth to 2,5
million
 in 2015.
In addition
,
France
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students
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 rate plunged from almost 3,5
million
 to 2,5
million
 in 2005.
Then
, after remaining steady for 5 years, it rocketed to approximately 4,5
million
at the end
 of the period.
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