your company has recently introduced a new work uniform. You are mostly happy with the uniform, but there is one thing that you do not like. Write a letter to your manager. In the letter say what you like about the uniform explain what you don’t like about the uniform suggest how the uniform can be improved
Dear Mr. Brown,
I am writing
this
letter to express my satisfaction regarding the introduction of a new uniform
at our company.
It had
been a decade Wrong verb form
has
Change preposition
since that
that
staff Correct determiner usage
the
work
in our company Wrong verb form
working
was wearing
the same Wrong verb form
wore
old fashioned
dress every day at Add a hyphen
old-fashioned
office
; Add an article
the office
however
, this
new uniform
is fancy, and it will enhance the personality of our employees besides
giving a
fresh look. Correct pronoun usage
them a
Additionally
, I like the stuff along with
the new style of it.
Although
every one
is satisfied with the new Replace the word
everyone
uniform
, I think the colour of uniform
is too bright which is neon green. Add an article
the uniform
Not to mention
, it would not be suitable for summer
season.
Since people prefer to wear some light colours in Add an article
the summer
summers
, the colour of Fix the agreement mistake
summer
uniform
should be changed. It would be Correct article usage
the uniform
grate
if Correct your spelling
great
this
new uniform
will
be in Wrong verb form
would
light
green shade as it will suit Correct article usage
a light
to
Change preposition
apply
every one
for all seasons.
I thank you for your time and Replace the word
everyone
considerations
in advance.
Yours sincerely,
Amandeep KaurFix the agreement mistake
consideration
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task achievement
You have addressed all parts of the task, but providing more specific details on how the uniform enhances the employees' personalities would improve the response.
coherence cohesion
Some sentences can be rephrased for better clarity and grammar accuracy, such as 'Since people prefer to wear some light colours in summers, the colour of uniform should be changed.' It could be rephrased to 'Since people prefer to wear lighter colours in the summer, the uniform's colour should be changed.'
task achievement
The tone of the letter is suitable and polite, which is appropriate for writing to a manager.
coherence cohesion
The letter has a clear structure with an introduction, body paragraphs, and a closing statement.