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your company has recently introduced a new work uniform. You are mostly happy with the uniform, but there is one thing that you do not like. Write a letter to your manager. In the letter say what you like about the uniform explain what you don’t like about the uniform suggest how the uniform can be improved

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Dear Mr. Brown, I am writing
this
 letter to express my satisfaction regarding the introduction of a new
uniform
 at our company. It
had
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has
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 been a decade
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since that
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that
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the
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 staff
work
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working
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 in our company
was wearing
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wore
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 the same
old fashioned
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 dress every day at
office
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;
however
,
this
 new
uniform
 is fancy, and it will enhance the personality of our employees
besides
 giving
a
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them a
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fresh look.
Additionally
, I like the stuff
along with
 the new style of it.
Although
every one
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 is satisfied with the new
uniform
, I think the colour of
uniform
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 is too bright which is neon green.
Not to mention
, it would not be suitable for
summer
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the summer
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 season. Since people prefer to wear some light colours in
summers
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summer
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, the colour of
uniform
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the uniform
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 should be changed. It would be
grate
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 if
this
 new
uniform
will
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would
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 be in
light
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a light
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 green shade as it will suit
to
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apply
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every one
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 for all seasons. I thank you for your time and
considerations
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 in advance. Yours sincerely, Amandeep Kaur
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task achievement
You have addressed all parts of the task, but providing more specific details on how the uniform enhances the employees' personalities would improve the response.
coherence cohesion
Some sentences can be rephrased for better clarity and grammar accuracy, such as 'Since people prefer to wear some light colours in summers, the colour of uniform should be changed.' It could be rephrased to 'Since people prefer to wear lighter colours in the summer, the uniform's colour should be changed.'
task achievement
The tone of the letter is suitable and polite, which is appropriate for writing to a manager.
coherence cohesion
The letter has a clear structure with an introduction, body paragraphs, and a closing statement.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • introduced
  • appreciation
  • pleasing
  • professional image
  • elegant
  • sophistication
  • professionalism
  • high quality
  • appearance
  • comfort
  • modern
  • stylish
  • tailored
  • sleek lines
  • polished
  • discomfort
  • relaxed
  • adjustable
  • beneficial
  • aesthetics
  • commitment
  • valued
  • enhance
  • modifications
  • impression
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