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Writing Samples
Band 1.5

All cars that burn fossil fuels should be banned and electric cars should replace them. Do you agree or disagree

#cars #fuels
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People should
use
 electric
cars
instead
 of
cars
 that
use
 petrol. I strongly agree with that for many reasons which are electric
cars
 environmentally friendly and cheaper than petrol
cars
. The
cars
 which
use
 electricity are good for the environment.
This
 kind of car
have
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has
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 less carbon because they don't
use
 fossil fuels. It
also
 can help in reducing the global warming.
For
example
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example,
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 an
Amrican
Correct your spelling
American
 company produces one of the best electric
vehicles
on
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in
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 the world called
Tasla
Correct your spelling
Tesla
. Electric
vehicles
consider
Wrong verb form
are considered
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less
Correct quantifier usage
apply
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cheaper than
cars
 that
use
 petrol. These
vehicles
 have lower costs
offer
Correct your spelling
over
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 the year in general. People can charge it easily at home without the need for stations.
For
example
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example,
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 there are
study
Fix the agreement mistake
studies
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shows
Wrong verb form
showing
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 that electric
cars
 cost 50% less
what
Correct word choice
than
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it
Correct pronoun usage
they
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used
Add a missing verb
are used
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in
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on
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 the roads. All in all I totally with using electric
vehicles
 because
it
Correct pronoun usage
they
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 keep our environment clean and
save
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saves
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 our many too.
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The main points presented are relevant to the topic and provide a good basis for the argument.
coherence cohesion
The conclusion effectively summarizes the main arguments presented in the essay.

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • fossil fuels
  • emissions
  • air pollution
  • greenhouse gases
  • climate change
  • sustainable
  • renewable
  • electric vehicles
  • battery technology
  • charging infrastructure
  • range anxiety
  • government support
  • incentives
  • subsidies
  • renewable energy
  • environmental impact
  • energy efficiency
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