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The graph below shows average carbon dioxide (CO2) emissions per person in the United Kingdoms, Sweden, Italy and Portugal between 1967 and 2007 Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows average carbon dioxide (CO2) emissions per person in the United Kingdoms, Sweden, Italy and Portugal between 1967 and 2007 Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line graph illustrates the amount of carbon dioxide in metric
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 per person in four countries which are respectively the United Kingdom, Sweden, Italy and Portugal from 1967 to 2007.
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it is clear that
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 Italy and Portugal showed an upward trend,
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 the United Kingdom and Sweden went down over the
40
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40-year
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 period. In 1967, there was a dramatic rise until 1977 by almost 6 metric
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 the growth
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continued
 slightly between 1977 and 1997 after that it remained stable until the end of the period with around 8 metric
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. The carbon dioxide emissions of Italy started at under
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2 metric
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 afterwards
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 had a steady increase from 1967 to1987.
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 the amount of CO2 in Italy went up in
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 10
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 , the metric
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 didn't change in
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 10
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. The number of carbon
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 in Sweden rose significantly until it reached the top of peak
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8 to 10. Followed by it had considerable decrease next 30
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.
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, the tonne of United Kingdom demonstrated downward trend during 40
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 period which started from
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roughly
 11 to around 9 metric
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words tonnes, years with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "went down" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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