Some people think that the government should make university education free for all students, regardless of their financial situation. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
I totally agree with
this
statement. Some governments have to provide universities free for all students , according on
poor families Change preposition
to
also
, encourage young people to complete their education
.
To conclude
, there are opportunities for young
for their future not only the chance but Correct article usage
the young
also
they have a passion to present themselves for any major . In the same way, almost higher
Correct determiner usage
all higher
education
became by
financial Change preposition
apply
besides
that some families faced issue
Fix the agreement mistake
issues
to aid
their sons . Change preposition
in aiding
For example
, my friend has all the knowledge but he dose
not have Correct your spelling
does
a
money to join a university . Under these circumstances, we should improve our Correct article usage
the
education
or we will lose our young people. As far as education
is concerned in
these days Change preposition
apply
besides
that it is the most indispensable things
. Fix the agreement mistake
thing
In addition
, all young people hope
find Add the particle
hope to
fascinating
Correct article usage
a fascinating
education
even though they truly become educated .
On the other hand
, as result
across Correct article usage
a result
wide-world
there Add a comma
wide-world,
are
a substantial resource Change the verb form
is
such
as humans as mentality and ways of thinking . In that case, we must invest our
nation and afford space in order to aid them . Change preposition
in our
In other words
, in spite of we have facilities and budget
Correct article usage
a budget
but
governments Correct word choice
apply
did
not allow Wrong verb form
do
to
make Correct pronoun usage
us to
universities
Change the noun form
university
education
available therefore
, humans must demanding to take
evidence .
Wrong verb form
demand
To sum up
, I believe that when governments invest on
their nation , they will observe all results as Change preposition
in
quality
of life or aware to lead countries' futures Add an article
the quality
in particular
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coherence cohesion
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coherence cohesion
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You have provided a clear position on the issue, which is crucial for a high task achievement score.
coherence cohesion
Your essay discusses both the benefits of free university education and potential issues faced by students and governments, showing a good range of arguments.
Word Count
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