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The diagrams below show a structure that is used to generate electricity from wave power. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagrams below show a structure that is used to generate electricity from wave power. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The two diagrams illustrate the processes involved in the production of electricity using wave power, First of all, a
column
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 is built on a cliff or
sea
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 wall with a turbine placed
inbetween
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. The
column
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 is
also
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 connected to a
chamber
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into

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in
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 which the
sea
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 water flows
into
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. From diagram A, it shows that the
sea
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 flows into the
chamber
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, and pushes air from the bottom all the way out of the
column
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.
On
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 the process of flowing out, it rotates the turbine clockwise, which in turn generates mechanical energy to be converted into electrical energy. In diagram B, it can be clearly seen that air from the atmosphere moves back into the
column
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 and flows into the
chamber
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 thereby rotating the turbines once again in a clockwise motion. As the air reaches the
chamber
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, it pushes the wave out into the
sea
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.
Therefore
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, the movement of the turbines creates
the
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electrical energy.

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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words column, sea, chamber with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "diagrams" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "wave" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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