A friend of yours is thinking of going on a camping holiday for the first time this summer. He/She has asked for your advice. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter, > explain why you think your friend would enjoy a camping holiday > describe some possible disadvantages > say whether you would like to go camping with your friend this summer Write at least 150 words.
Dear James,
I hope
this
letter finds you well. I am delighted to know that you are thinking of going on a camping holiday in
Change preposition
apply
this
summer for the first time. I am writing this
letter to let you know some information that you needs
to be known before you go Correct subject-verb agreement
need
for
camping.
I am glad to know that you are going on Change preposition
apply
a
camping Remove the article
apply
to
Ben Nevis Change preposition
in
this
summer. I went to that mountain before
a couple of yearsChange preposition
apply
, it
had a Rephrase
ago, it
lot
of deers
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deer
as well as
small ponds which you will like a lot
. In addition
to that
there are different trials to reach the top of the mountain. Add a comma
that,
As well as
there are a few camping spot
on these routes. As you are keen towards hiking you will find it easy to reach the top of the mountain.
Change to a plural noun
spots
Furthermore
, I would like to let you know some cons that you should aware
of before going there. As I mentioned earlier, there Add a missing verb
be aware
is
a Correct subject-verb agreement
are
lot
of deers
. Even though they are beautiful, please maintain some distance Fix the agreement mistake
deer
with
them because they have harmed a Change preposition
from
lot
of people. In addition
to that stay in the
place where it looks safe rather than staying inside the woods.
I thinkCorrect article usage
a
,
I will be on my semester holidays Remove the comma
apply
in
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apply
this
summer. Would you mind If I come
with you Wrong verb form
came
for
campingChange preposition
apply
.
As we haven't spent a Change the punctuation
?
lot
of time together, it would be better if you go there together. I love to be a part of your first camping experience. I am hoping to see you soon.
Yours lovingly,
Sarah.Submitted by r.harip3 on
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grammatical accuracy
Ensure consistent use of singular/plural forms and subject-verb agreement (e.g., "need to be known" should be "need to be known").
coherence cohesion
Try to refine paragraph transitions. For example, use transition words like "Moreover" instead of "In addition to that" repetitively.
task achievement
Very thorough response to the task. You've addressed all aspects: why your friend would enjoy it, potential disadvantages, and your interest in joining him.
suitable writing tone
Good use of a friendly and engaging tone appropriate for writing to a friend.
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite