A friend of yours is thinking of going on a camping holiday for the first time this summer. He/She has asked for your advice. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter, > explain why you think your friend would enjoy a camping holiday > describe some possible disadvantages > say whether you would like to go camping with your friend this summer Write at least 150 words.

Dear James, I hope
this
letter finds you well. I am delighted to know that you are thinking of going on a camping holiday
in
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this
summer for the first time. I am writing
this
letter to let you know some information that you
needs
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to be known before you go
for
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camping. I am glad to know that you are going on
a
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camping
to
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Ben Nevis
this
summer. I went to that mountain
before
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a couple of years
, it
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had a
lot
of
deers
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as well as
small ponds which you will like a
lot
.
In addition
to
that
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there are different trials to reach the top of the mountain.
As well as
there are a few camping
spot
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on these routes. As you are keen towards hiking you will find it easy to reach the top of the mountain.
Furthermore
, I would like to let you know some cons that you should
aware
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of before going there. As I mentioned earlier, there
is
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a
lot
of
deers
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. Even though they are beautiful, please maintain some distance
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them because they have harmed a
lot
of people.
In addition
to that stay in
the
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place where it looks safe rather than staying inside the woods. I think
,
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I will be on my semester holidays
in
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this
summer. Would you mind If I
come
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with you
for
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camping
.
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As we haven't spent a
lot
of time together, it would be better if you go there together. I love to be a part of your first camping experience. I am hoping to see you soon. Yours lovingly, Sarah.
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grammatical accuracy
Ensure consistent use of singular/plural forms and subject-verb agreement (e.g., "need to be known" should be "need to be known").
coherence cohesion
Try to refine paragraph transitions. For example, use transition words like "Moreover" instead of "In addition to that" repetitively.
task achievement
Very thorough response to the task. You've addressed all aspects: why your friend would enjoy it, potential disadvantages, and your interest in joining him.
suitable writing tone
Good use of a friendly and engaging tone appropriate for writing to a friend.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • adventure
  • serenity
  • outdoors
  • refreshing
  • hustle and bustle
  • inherent
  • foster
  • distractions
  • cost-effective
  • unpredictable
  • wildlife
  • adequate preparation
  • physical demands
  • researching
  • campsite
  • lasting memories
  • mutual interests
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