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The graph shows population variation in three wildlife species from 2011 to 2016 in North America and its coastal areas. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph shows population variation in three wildlife species from 2011 to 2016 in North America and its coastal areas. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line graph illustrates the variety of three wild
animals
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 types during the five years in the coastal areas of North America.
Overall
,
it is clear that
,
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 there
were
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 a high rise in
bears
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the bears
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 group, in the
meantime
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dolphins
 went down significantly.
Moreover
,
whales
 had
a
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 increase and decrease at the same time.
Firstly
, in 2011, the top-ranked one
were
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dolphins
 by 150000,
whereas
 the lowest result was shown by bears approximately 10000 species. In the middle of them were
whales
 with 80000.
However
, in 2013,
bears
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the bears
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 and
whales
 went up to 10000, so they had an equal amount of animals,
meanwhile
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dolphins
 had fallen dramatically.
Secondly
, in 2015,
dolphins
 still had a decrease,
while
 remained two categories had a growth. In 2016, bears had a huge rise to 200000,
hence
 other two types went down
noticably
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noticeably
, especially
dolphins
 to 0, meanwhile
whales
 to 50000.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words dolphins, whales with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "went down" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • population variation
  • wildlife species
  • coastal areas
  • trend
  • increase/decrease
  • stable
  • year-by-year analysis
  • significant changes
  • species-wise comparison
  • influence
  • climate change
  • human activities
  • conservation efforts
  • natural predation
  • inland areas
  • population trends
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