The graph shows population variation in three wildlife species from 2011 to 2016 in North America and its coastal areas. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph shows population variation in three wildlife species from 2011 to 2016 in North America and its coastal areas. 

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The line graph illustrates the variety of three wild
animals
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types during the five years in the coastal areas of North America.
Overall
,
it is clear that
,
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there
were
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a high rise in
bears
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the bears
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group, in the
meantime
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dolphins
went down significantly.
Moreover
,
whales
had
a
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increase and decrease at the same time.
Firstly
, in 2011, the top-ranked one
were
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dolphins
by 150000,
whereas
the lowest result was shown by bears approximately 10000 species. In the middle of them were
whales
with 80000.
However
, in 2013,
bears
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and
whales
went up to 10000, so they had an equal amount of animals,
meanwhile
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dolphins
had fallen dramatically.
Secondly
, in 2015,
dolphins
still had a decrease,
while
remained two categories had a growth. In 2016, bears had a huge rise to 200000,
hence
other two types went down
noticably
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noticeably
, especially
dolphins
to 0, meanwhile
whales
to 50000.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words dolphins, whales with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "went down" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 2 times.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • population variation
  • wildlife species
  • coastal areas
  • trend
  • increase/decrease
  • stable
  • year-by-year analysis
  • significant changes
  • species-wise comparison
  • influence
  • climate change
  • human activities
  • conservation efforts
  • natural predation
  • inland areas
  • population trends
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