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The chart shows the division of household tasks by gender in Great Britain.

The chart shows the division of household tasks by gender in Great Britain.
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The bar chart provides data about the amount of participating women and men in chores in Great Britain. The chores are categorized
in
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 six groups and data is
according to
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 the number of
minutes
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 per person per
a
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apply
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day. Looking from an
overall
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 perspective, the women’s cooperating time in
cleaning
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the cleaning
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 category is higher than the rest.
In addition
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, males spend most of
chores’
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their chores’
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 time on gardening and taking care of
pet
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pets
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. In terms of the most significant feature of the bar chart, every woman is noticeably in charge of cleaning, baking and washing up, following that cleaning house and
tiding
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tidying
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 take 58
minutes
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 of every woman in a day which is in a second rank.
On the contrary
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,
Maintenance
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 odd jobs is
less
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a less
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 popular task among women
which
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apply
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accounts
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accounting
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 for 9.5
minutes
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 per person per day.
On the other hand
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, Men’s duties in
household
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the household
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 are apparently high in gardening and looking after
pet
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pets
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. In comparison, the clothes, washing, ironing, and sewing are the least popular household
task
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tasks
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 for men
,
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 and rank the
last
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.
Compare
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Compared
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 to women
which
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who
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 make up 25
minutes
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 in the same category is almost 10 times more than men’s participation.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words minutes with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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