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The computers are widely used in education and some people think that teachers do not play an important role in the classroom. To what extent do you agree

#computers #education #people #teachers #role #classroom
Nowadays,
technologies
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 control
most
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 of
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human life including education purposes. We can't deny that
technologies
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 helps a lot in our work and other activities. Most
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the
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school
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schools
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 today, provide their students with
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technologies
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for
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the
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better study . Despite
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their benefits,
technologies
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 misguide their users
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 the students. Teenager
studens
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students
student
 tend to have
a very high levels
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 of curiosity and sometimes it's not a good thing. They use
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technologies
 to
fulfill
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 their curiosity.
This
 is where the teachers play a very important role in part of the educational system , they help the student by providing moral knowledge and guiding their student to the right path.
Furthermore
, teachers have the responsibility to forge their students into
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better
person
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people
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 and act like
a parents
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parents
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 in
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the calssroom
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calssroom
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classroom
classrooms
. They should be the main
suppport
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support
 system in school.
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Coherence and Cohesion
Try to create a more structured introduction by clearly presenting your main argument. This helps set a clear direction for the essay.
Coherence and Cohesion
Include a conclusion to summarize your main points and restate your argument. This will enhance the logical flow and completeness of your essay.
Task Achievement
Use specific examples to support your points. This can make your argument more compelling and easier to follow.
Language Use
Review your essay for grammar and spelling mistakes to improve readability. Small details like these can make a significant difference.
Task Achievement
You have provided a clear stance on the issue, emphasizing the important role that teachers play despite the growing use of technology.
Task Achievement
The argument about students' curiosity leading them astray without proper guidance is effective and demonstrates insight into potential issues with technology in education.
Coherence and Cohesion
You have identified key roles of teachers such as providing moral knowledge and acting as a support system, which strengthens your argument.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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