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The picture below shows the recycling process of wasted glass bottles. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The diagram illustrates how wasted
glass
bottles
 are recycled. The process consists of three stages, beginning with the disposal of
bottles
 and culminating in the delivery of the reprocessed containers.
To begin
 with, used
bottles
 are thrown away by consumers in a container for
glass
 litter.
Next,
a truck is responsible for all the rubbish to be transported from the collection point to a cleaning plant. Before, all the
glass
 is distributed into clear, brown or green, it has to undergo
high pressurised
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 water.
Following
this
, in a
glass
factory
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 the material is turned into tiny pieces. After it is put
on
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 a furnace, the
glass
 is heated on fire. In order to recreate
bottles
 the material is
then
 mixed with liquid,
in addition
 to that some new
glass
 is added which is
also
 in a liquid state. In the subsequent stage, the mixture is moulded into a bottle shape.
Finally
, products are packed and delivered to the supermarkets.
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task response
The essay summarizes the diagram well by detailing the main stages of the recycling process. However, there could be additional mention of any specific details about the quantities or types of glass handled at each stage, if relevant and available. Consider reorganizing the details to follow a clear and chronological order for better clarity.
coherence cohesion
Your essay has a good structure with identifiable stages and steps. However, the paragraphing could be improved to help the reader follow the process more easily. Transition words such as 'First', 'Next', and 'Then' can guide the reader through each stage of the process more effectively.
task response
You have provided a clear summary of the main stages of the glass recycling process.
coherence cohesion
Your essay includes an introduction and conclusion, and the steps are logically ordered.

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Recycling bins
  • Glass bottles
  • Sorting
  • Contaminants
  • Crushing
  • Cullet
  • Furnace
  • Molten glass
  • Molding
  • Cooling
  • Quality control
  • Distributing
  • Reused
  • Recycled glass
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