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The graph below shows information about the kinds of food that teenagers in Australia enjoyed eating. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows information about the kinds of food that teenagers in Australia enjoyed eating. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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Contained in the given line graph is the
number
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 pertaining to the diverse ranges of dishes that many adolescents in Australia
loved
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love
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 to eat In general, hamburgers and pizza experienced an upward pattern with the exception of fish and chips.
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, despite being the most trending food in the first decade, fish and chips saw a significant drop in figures
comparing
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 to the total. Commencing with fish and chips, it could be observed that the
number
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 which
demostrated
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demonstrated
demonstrates
 the highest position was 100
times
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 before falling down to just over 83
times
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 in 1980.
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However
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 during the period of next five years, the
number
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 had a minor increase to nearly 97
times
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 and
then
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 rapidly
declining
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 to under 40
times
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 in the
entired
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entire
 period Turning to the two types of food which witnessed increasing trend throughout the period of time. In 1975, hamburgers and pizza saw the lowest
number
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 which started at just over 10
times
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 and 5
times
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 respectively. With respect to hamburgers, the data dramatically climbed up to 85
times
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 in 1985 before growing up to 100 in the next 10 years and stabilized at
this
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 figures until 2000.
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, the
number
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 of
pizza
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pizzas
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also
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 went up to approximately 85
times
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 by 1995 before reaching a plateau
at the end
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 of the
researed
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researched
 year
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, times with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "just over" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • percentage
  • preference
  • frequency
  • trend
  • popularity
  • notably
  • anomaly
  • dominant
  • contrast
  • exhibit
  • proportion
  • category
  • significant
  • rate
  • margin
  • predominant
  • marginally
  • substantial
  • consistent
  • overall
  • variety
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