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You borrowed some books from your school or college library. Unfortunately, you have to go away to visit a sick relative and cannot return the books in time. Write a letter to the library. Explain what has happened and tell them what you want to do about it. You should write at least 150 words.

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Dear Manager, I am Rohan Roy, I am travelling today with your airline flight A159. from UAE to Canada at 9:30 PM but I am writing
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 letter to express my concern about facing problems at the airport related to my Baggage transportation and boarding pass. I have 20 kg overweight luggage for that I have to Rs. 40000 INR. which is more than the normal charge per kg. I want to ask you why
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 time when I travelled at that time I paid Rs.500 per kg. now why there is sudden drastic changes compared to the previous amount
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 getting the boarding pass because I requested
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 on the spot for The window seat
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I am ready to pay extra charges for that. Your
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 we do not have a window seat. Please I am requesting you to decrease the charges for the luggage bags because
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 unaffordable for a normal person. Kindly think about my request. Thank you in advance. Regards, Rohan Roy
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suitable writing tone
Strive to maintain a consistent and suitable tone throughout the letter. Consider revising the tone to be more formal and respectful as it is an official complaint letter.
complete response
Provide a clear and complete explanation of your actions regarding the books you borrowed, such as possible alternatives for returning them when unable to do so in person.
single idea per paragraph
For better coherence, consider organizing ideas so that issues are addressed in separate paragraphs. Each paragraph should present a complete narrative or point.
greeting and closing
The letter opens with a clear statement addressing the manager, making it evident to whom the letter is dedicated.
logical structure
The letter presents a structured narrative, beginning with introducing oneself which is coherent.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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