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Having conversation with people in your homeland with a foreign language can create social and functional issues. The following essay is going to discuss why it is problematic to have a foreign dialect and say why this happening can cause serious problems.

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To start with,
people
 who do not speak in domestic language face uncountable challenges in everyday life, the reason behind
this
 is that
people
 cannot communicate with those humans in a way they are comfortable.
For example
, the other day my Indian
neighbor
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 was telling me that he had been through many problems
specially
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 in his relationships with
families
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 and friends.
Furthermore
, he even said that he is
spending
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such
 a hard time cause his relationship with his domestic partner is going through so many issues, because of their difficulties in communicating.
On
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 of the biggest troubles that foreign dialect makes is in
work
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 category. Having trouble with fluent speaking and not being able to communicate with local
people
 nicely can get you negative points in finding a job,
specially
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 the ones with social skills in need.
Moreover
,
this
 case can lead some
people
 into lack of confidence, embarrassment or even separation from
community
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. In conclusion, without any doubt speaking in an external language can harm foreigners or immigrants in many aspects,
therefore
, they have to consider it
while
 trying to increase their knowledge in
local
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 tongue.
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single idea per paragraph
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logical structure
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suitable writing tone
Your writing tone is suitable for an IELTS essay, making it formal and appropriate for the Task 2 requirements.
greeting and closing
You have used a clear introduction and conclusion, which frames the essay well.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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