The graph below shows the changes in the maximum number of Asian elephants between 1997 and 2004. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

The graph below shows the changes in the maximum number of Asian elephants between 1997 and 2004.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Write at least 150 words.
The given bar graph provides information on: the changes in the total number of Asian
elephants
in 1997 and 2004. It is obvious that there are some significant changes in the given figure.
Overall
, there was an upward trend in the proportion of Asian
elephants
in 1997While, and there was a downward trend in 2004 .
According to
the chart, in both Vietnam and
Laos
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Laos,
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the percentage did not change between 1997 and 2004.
Nevertheless
,
India
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Indian
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elephants
in 1997
are
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higher than in 2004. Malaysia had an increase in numbers reaching 3000
elephants
in 1997 Which had a dramatic decrease is under 2000 in 2004.
Moreover
, there was a period of stability in Sri Lanka in both years. Cambodia and China had the lowest proportions .
In contrast
, Myanmar and
Thailan
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Thailand
were
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the highest
number
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numbers
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of
elephants
in 1997
While
was
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were
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the lowest in 2004.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words elephants with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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