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A friend of yours is thinking of going on a camping holiday for the first time this summer. She has asked for your advice. ・explain why you think she would enjoy ・describe possible advantages ・say whether you would like to go camping with your friend

#friend #holiday #first #time #summer #advice #・explain #・describe #・say
Dear Nicole, I'm happy for you that you're going to take a summer holiday, and I definitely recommend you
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glamping if you go camping as a female solo trip. The facilities are kitted out
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 as a shower and a fireplace, so it is a piece of cake to stay there without preparing even
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 are alone and a beginner.
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 there are many counterparts
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 you might make new adventurous friends. But, North
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 Island is off the beaten track, that's why you should be aware that any devices might be offline.
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join you,
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 term as you, I would go with you!! Keep in touch, Natsuki
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