You see an advertisement for a product. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter Tell your friend where you saw the advertisement Describe the product Explain why your friend should buy this product.

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Dear Amy, I hope
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letter finds you well. I am incredibly sorry not to have been in touch recently. Life has been a little bit hectic. I am writing
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letter to recommend a
blender
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for you. I saw the advertisement which promotes the ABC
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several times when I scrolled on my Facebook.
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advertisement talks about the features and instructions of
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product. Every time when I
saw
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product, I always think about you and would like to send the link to you.
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blender
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is an Australian brand and
made
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in Melbourne. It is made of glass and stainless materials, which is easy to clean after
using
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. There are several functions of
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blender
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. First of all, it can be used to make shaved ice and ice creams, which
provides
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you the opportunity to enjoy homemade healthy desserts in the summer.
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, you can use it to mix vegetables and fruits to make smoothies, which is a good meal to have when you are losing
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weight. I consider
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machine
is
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extremely suitable for you as you mentioned that you desperately needed a mixer or
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to make healthy food at home. Added to that, I reckon the price is affordable for you. I hope my suggestions are useful for you. Keep in touch. Best wishes, Bella
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tone
Try to maintain a consistent tone throughout the letter. While your opening is conversational, the latter part of the letter becomes a bit more formal. Aim for consistency to keep the reader engaged.
structure
Although the letter is well-structured, consider adding a brief introductory sentence about the advertisement before diving into its description. This will improve the logical flow between paragraphs.
tone
You used a friendly and engaging tone, which is very suitable for a letter to a friend.
task response
The letter is comprehensive and addresses all the points in the task, providing sufficient details about where you saw the advertisement, a description of the product, and reasons why your friend should buy it.
coherence and cohesion
Each paragraph represents a single idea, making your letter easy to follow.
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