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The picture below shows the recycling process of wasted glass bottles. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

#picture #process #glass #bottles #information #features #comparisons
The given picture illustrates the process of recycling
water
glass
bottle
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bottles
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.
Overall
, there are three stages for recycling
water
glass
bottle
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bottles
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. It started with
used
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a used
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bottle
 from the customer and ended up back to
customer
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the customer
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 with
new
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a new
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water
glass
bottle
.
Firstly
,
first
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the first
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 stage was a condition where
used
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the used
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bottle
 came from the customer will pick up from
collection
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the collection
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 point and bring it up to the plant. After that, entering
to
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apply
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stages
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stage
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 two, bottles will be cleared by high pressurized
water
 and divided by
it
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their
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colors
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colours
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 which are green, brown,
clear
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and clear
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.
Then
, it will sent to the
glass
 factory.
According to
 the
glass
 factory, bottles were processed into pieces of
glass
.
Next,
it will be heated until
become
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becomes
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furnace
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a furnace
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. After that,
liquid
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the liquid
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glass
 will be
mixing
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mixed
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 with the new liquid
glass
. So, it can be
moulding
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moulded
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 to be new
water
bottle
glass
. Entering
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apply
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the
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apply
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stage three,
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the water
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water
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the water
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glass
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bottles
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bottle
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bottles
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brought
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is brought
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 to
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the filling
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filling
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the filling
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 and packaging section and
then
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apply
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it
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apply
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distribute
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distributes
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 to the supermarket.
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task achievement
Be sure to include more specific details for each stage to improve the completeness of your response. For instance, what happens at the cleaning stage?
coherence cohesion
Use more linking words and phrases to enhance the logical flow and overall coherence of your essay. Words like 'afterward,' 'then,' and 'subsequently' can make your essay smoother to read.
coherence cohesion
Your essay has a clear structure, distinguishing the stages of the recycling process. This makes it easier to follow along.
task achievement
You have successfully identified and summarized the main stages in the process, which shows a good understanding of the topic.

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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Recycling bins
  • Glass bottles
  • Sorting
  • Contaminants
  • Crushing
  • Cullet
  • Furnace
  • Molten glass
  • Molding
  • Cooling
  • Quality control
  • Distributing
  • Reused
  • Recycled glass
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