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Increasing the price of petrol is the only way to solve environmental problems. Do you agree or disagree?

#price #petrol
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It is sometimes argued that increasing petroleum prices is the only measurement to decrease environmental
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.
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this
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 can help reduce the problem, I strongly believe that there are many ways to tackle environmental
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 as educating
people
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 about habitat
issues
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 and applying
regulations
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 on individuals and companies. Increasing the price of
petrol
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 is not the only solution to environmental
issues
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. There are many ways to solve the problems related to surroundings.
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, authorities should educate
people
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 about the importance of saving the environment. By addressing the issue to the public and the possible consequences,
people
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 will be involved in the efforts to save the environment. But, if the
government
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 focus only on increasing the price of
petrol
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,
people
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 will find alternative resources other than
petrol
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 and
gas
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. In the United States,
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, in Texas, USA, the
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instead
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 of using different ways to solve the problem of increasing the hot weather
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 the increase in factory emissions, decided to increase the
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 prices,
people
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,
as a result
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, cut down using
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 and the
government
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 forced to withdrew the new
gas
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 prices. The second method to solve the environmental
issues
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 is to apply
regulations
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 on individuals and companies to save the ecosystem. When
people
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 and businesses see that the
government
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 is serious about any breach of environmental rules, they definitely will obey the law.
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, authorities should monitor applying these
regulations
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 continuously to ensure that no one violates them.
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, Japan has strict rules about
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 emissions from industrial factories and any company that violates these rules will be forced to close. In conclusion, despite the effectiveness of increasing the price of
petrol
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 to mitigate environmental
issues
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, I believe that environmental awareness and strict
regulations
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 for
people
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 and companies will be more helpful in solving the ecosystem obstacles.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • 1. **Emissions:** Refers to the production and discharge of gases and particles, especially pollutants.
  • 2. **Greenhouse gases:** Gases that trap heat in the atmosphere, contributing to global warming.
  • 3. **Alternative energy:** Energy generated from sources that do not deplete natural resources or harm the environment.
  • 4. **Renewable energy:** Energy from sources that are naturally replenishing, such as wind or solar power.
  • 5. **Public transport:** Systems of buses, trains, etc., that are used by the public.
  • 6. **Investment:** The action or process of putting money into something for profit or for a material result.
  • 7. **Economical:** Avoiding waste of resources; cost-effective.
  • 8. **Environmental issues:** Problems related to the natural environment, such as pollution or climate change.
  • 9. **Global warming:** The gradual increase in the temperature of the Earth's atmosphere.
  • 10. **Incentive:** Something that motivates or encourages someone to do something.
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