As the internet becomes more popular, newspapers are becoming a thing of the past. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Nowadays, the internet is more admired by individuals,
whereas
newspaper
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a
object
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of the previous days. I totally agree with
this
view because online platform is
a
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easy and convenient way for everyone.
Firstly
, by connecting with
internet
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the internet
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,
people
engage with social media.
Additionally
, they know different news
as well as
activities in a single webpage by using
this
.
In addition
, they connect with their friends and family members. Online services are always available in any
parts
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of a country.
Besides
, it covers more topics than a newspaper.
For example
, some researchers conducted research and found that
,
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people
show more interest
on
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in
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using numerous websites
due to
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images,
audios
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and videos. It saves time and money than others.
On the other hand
, it
serves
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provides
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informations
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information
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of
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about
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any countries in the world and the cosmos. Not only local but
also
any
types
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type
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of details data.
Such
as political, national, international, sports and so on. But a magazine provides only
main
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features of a particular
countries
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country
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and
places
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place
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.
Moreover
, it is
quick
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method. Anyone can
konw
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know
anything within a second and everyone can use
this
.
Furthermore
, sometimes a print paper
focus
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focuses
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only
negative
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on negative
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views but in social
media
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media,
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we can get both positive and negative. So,
people
like to engage with it
for getting
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to get
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the truth.
For instance
, in Bangladesh, rural persons are detached from any newspaper because the authorities failed to
supplying
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this
and it is a long way from
main
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towns.
But
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individuals can get easy access
of
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to
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any online activities. In conclusion,
although
ancient
people
wait
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more
times
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time
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and
rely
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relied
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only on a magazine for
knowing
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apply
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any messages, young generations are
too fast
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faster
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than our past. They want everything in their hand. So, they engage social sites through various apps and software.
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coherence
Clarify and consistently use key terms. For instance, use 'internet' or 'online' instead of interchangeably using 'internet' and 'online platform.'
language
Some grammatical errors and awkward expressions are present. Work on sentence structure and grammar for clearer expression.
cohesion
Improve the connection between paragraphs for smoother flow of ideas. Use linking words effectively.
task response
Make sure to support main points with specific examples consistently. Your examples are sometimes general.
coherence
You have a clear introduction and conclusion that relate to the essay topic.
task response
You provide several reasons why you believe the internet is more popular than newspapers, addressing the task comprehensively.
task response
You highlight the specific advantages of the internet, like convenience, availability, and the variety of content.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Access
  • Convenient
  • Fast
  • Expensive
  • Wider range
  • News sources
  • Perspectives
  • Readership
  • Demographics
  • Physical
  • Tangible
  • Reading experience
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