As the internet becomes more popular, newspapers are becoming a thing of the past. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?
Nowadays, the internet is more admired by individuals,
whereas
newspaper
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newspapers
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of the previous days. I totally agree with Fix the agreement mistake
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this
view because online platform is a
easy and convenient way for everyone.
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Firstly
, by connecting with internet
, Correct article usage
the internet
people
engage with social media. Additionally
, they know different news as well as
activities in a single webpage by using this
. In addition
, they connect with their friends and family members. Online services are always available in any parts
of a country. Fix the agreement mistake
part
Besides
, it covers more topics than a newspaper. For example
, some researchers conducted research and found that,
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apply
people
show more interest on
using numerous websites Change preposition
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due to
enjoy
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enjoying
audios
and videos. It saves time and money than others.
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On the other hand
, it serves
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provides
informations
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pieces of information
of
any countries in the world and the cosmos. Not only local but Change preposition
about
also
any types
of details data. Fix the agreement mistake
type
Such
as political, national, international, sports and so on. But a magazine provides only main
features of a particular Correct article usage
the main
countries
and Fix the agreement mistake
country
places
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Moreover
, it is quick
method. Anyone can Add an article
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anything within a second and everyone can use Correct your spelling
know
this
. Furthermore
, sometimes a print paper focus
only Change the verb form
focuses
negative
views but in social Change preposition
on negative
media
we can get both positive and negative. So, Add a comma
media,
people
like to engage with it for getting
the truth. Change preposition
to get
For instance
, in Bangladesh, rural persons are detached from any newspaper because the authorities failed to supplying
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supply
this
and it is a long way from main
towns. Correct article usage
the main
But
individuals can get easy access Correct word choice
However
of
any online activities.
In conclusion, Change preposition
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although
ancient people
wait
more Wrong verb form
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times
and Fix the agreement mistake
time
rely
only on a magazine for Wrong verb form
relied
knowing
any messages, young generations are Verb problem
apply
too fast
than our past. They want everything in their hand. So, they engage social sites through various apps and software.Correct word choice
faster
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coherence
Clarify and consistently use key terms. For instance, use 'internet' or 'online' instead of interchangeably using 'internet' and 'online platform.'
language
Some grammatical errors and awkward expressions are present. Work on sentence structure and grammar for clearer expression.
cohesion
Improve the connection between paragraphs for smoother flow of ideas. Use linking words effectively.
task response
Make sure to support main points with specific examples consistently. Your examples are sometimes general.
coherence
You have a clear introduction and conclusion that relate to the essay topic.
task response
You provide several reasons why you believe the internet is more popular than newspapers, addressing the task comprehensively.
task response
You highlight the specific advantages of the internet, like convenience, availability, and the variety of content.