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The chart shows how frequently people in the USA ate in fast-food restaurants between 2003 and 2013. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The chart shows how frequently people in the USA ate in fast-food restaurants between 2003 and 2013. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
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The above chart shows us how the frequency of fast
food
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 consumption has changed in the USA between the years 2003 and 2013. The figure above shows the data collected in 2003, 2006, and 2013; having data from 2006 gives us the added benefit of being able to see if the trends observed in the graph are consistent or variable. The first thing one notices when presented with the above figure is the shape of the curve, which follows the normal distribution;
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 means that the value of the graph is highest at its median point and
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 tapers off in either direction. In our case,
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 tells us that most people consume fast
food
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 on a weekly to monthly basis
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 the number of people who consume fast
food
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 either every day or never is quite less. If we were to strike a direct comparison between the years 2003, and 2013, we can observe that people have started to migrate from eating fast
food
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 on a daily to weekly basis to consuming it on a monthly or even yearly basis indicating a rise in awareness about the effects of
such
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food
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 on one's health.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words food with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 2 times.
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