The graph below shows the rate of smoking per 1000 people in Someland from 1960 to 2000. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information in the graph below.
The line graph gives information about the average number of smoking people per 1,000 individuals in Someland over
Correct article usage
a 40-years
40-years
Correct your spelling
40-year
period
.
Looking at the overall
perspective, it can be seen that female
rate enjoyed an increase, Correct article usage
the female
while
the proportion of men declined over the period
.
To begin
with, despite the initial low number of smoking women at about 100 per 1,000 people, it grew significantly to 200 in 1965 till 1970, and to 300 after 5 years. Then
, the trend was followed by a gradual decrease from 1975 to 1990. However
, at the end
of the period
it plunged to 200, thus
showing that a
trend of smoking among women started reducing.
Regarding men`s line, Correct article usage
the
it is clear that
it experienced the opposite of women`s proportion. Beggining
with approximately 600 males per 1,000 people, it underwent a steady decrease till 1970, reaching 500 by 1975. Correct your spelling
Beginning
Next,
same as females, local males continued quitting smoking and accounted for nearly 400 in 1985 and for
300 in 1995, reaching Change preposition
apply
it
lowest point at almost 200 Change the pronoun
its
in
the end of the Change the preposition
at
period
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