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Some people say that distance learning is a quick and effective way to study. Others, however, disagree and say that distance learning programs can never be as good as courses taken in person. Do you agree or disagree with the statement?

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Begin with a clear thesis statement outlining your stance on the issue. This will help guide your essay and make your argument more focused.
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Include specific examples and evidence to support your points. This strengthens your argument and makes it more convincing.
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Ensure that every paragraph has a clear main idea and follow it up with supporting details. This enhances the logical flow of your essay.
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Avoid leaving incomplete sentences or ideas ('the', 'for instance', 'thus'). Make sure each point is fully developed and explicitly stated.
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The essay has a clear introduction and attempts to discuss both sides of the argument.
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The intention to explore multiple points shows a solid approach to the issue.

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • **Useful Vocabulary:**
  • 1. **Distance learning**: A way of studying where tuition is carried out over the Internet or other electronic media.
  • 2. **Flexible schedule**: Time-table that allows students to manage their own study hours.
  • 3. **Remote access**: The ability to access educational content from any location.
  • 4. **Cost-effective**: Economical; good value in relation to the money, time, or effort spent.
  • 5. **Digital literacy**: The ability to effectively use digital tools and platforms.
  • 6. **Self-discipline**: The ability to control one's behavior, emotions, and thoughts in the pursuit of long-term goals.
  • 7. **Hands-on experience**: Practical experience in a field of study, usually gained through physical participation.
  • 8. **Technological barriers**: Challenges related to the availability or use of technology.
  • 9. **Employer perception**: The way that employers view or regard a qualification or skill.
  • 10. **In-person interaction**: Face-to-face communication and engagement.
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