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The chart below shows the health spending among five different countries in 2002.

The chart below shows the health spending among five different countries in 2002.
The given information about graph which
represent
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 the result of a survey of children's activities between the percentage of health spending among GDP in five countries in 2002 which is
different
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a different
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 percentage . If we look at the first chart we understand
thar
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that
this
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 is about Japan
have
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highest
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the highest
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 rate
in
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 spending
of
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on
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 GDP which is 16
percent
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 and
lowest
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the lowest
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 rate in grey which is 4
percent
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along with
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 Italy, France, Germany and etc. If we cast an eye we understand that
the
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 second chart about
USA
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the USA
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 they have
highest
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the highest
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 interest in Dancing which is 27
percent
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 and
lowest
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the lowest
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 interest in listening to music which is 10
percent
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along with
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 Netball, Reading, Gymnastics
and
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etc. The significant comments are girls are better than
boy's
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boys
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 because of
good
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the good
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 percentage
in
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "along with".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words percent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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