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The given line graph illustrates the proportion of people who live in cities in various SouthEast Asia nations over a span of 30 years, from 1970 to 2020 and forecast between 2030 and 2040.

The given line graph illustrates the proportion of people who live in cities in various SouthEast Asia nations over a span of 30 years, from 1970 to 2020 and forecast between 2030 and 2040.
The given line graph illustrates the proportion of people who live in
cities
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 in various SouthEast Asia nations over a span of 30 years, from 1970 to 2020 and forecast between 2030 and 2040.
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, there is a significant increase in the population living in
cities
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 of all countries, with the
figure
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 for Malaysia being the highest throughout the entire time frame, and the
quantity
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 of individuals living in urban areas in
Indonesia
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predicted
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 to overtake Thailand and
Indonesia
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 in order to dominate the second position.
According to
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 the graph, the number of citizens living in
cities
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 in Malaysia took the top in
the
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recent
time
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,
this
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figure
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 rose steadily to reach its peak of 75% in 2020(compared to 1970 was 30%),
while
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 that of the Philippines rose and fell, standing at just above 30%
initially
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, after which it grew to nearly 50%, and
then
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 experienced a dramatic decrease to 40% in 2010, and after a decade
this
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figure
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 climbed to 45%.
Indonesia
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 and Thailand witnessed a rise, respectively, the
figure
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 for the former shot up to 50% in 2020 after half a century, starting from 1970(only 15%), and the number of people living in urban areas in the latter slightly increased to 30% in 2020. As regards Malaysia, the prediction for
this
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 country is that it still dominates the lead,
the
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 percentage of
population
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the population
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 in
cities
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 in
this
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 nation accounting for 90% in both 2030 and 2040. Ranking second is the
figure
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 for
Indonesia
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, the forecast for
this
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 country will be about 50% to 53% in 2030 and
next
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the next
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 10 years, respectively.
Following
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this
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 are the Philippines and Thailand, the increasing rate of people in urban areas for the former is approximately 45% in both 2030 and 2040,
while
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 that of the latter is about 30% in 2030 and will rocket to 40% after a decade.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words cities, figure, indonesia with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "give" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "proportion" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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