The two maps illustrate changes that have taken place in an area from 1995 to the present.

The two maps illustrate changes that have taken place in an area from 1995 to the present.
The diagrams show how a seaside town has shifted since 1995.
Overall
, the town has undergone dramatic changes, the most important of which are the expansion of housing areas, the disappearance of the green area and the development of amenities catering for recreational needs. From 1995 to the present, the north of the town saw many alterations, these developments have converted the fishing
villeage
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village
into a tourism destination.
Initially
, a recreational sports exercise was constructed with a golf course and a tennis field in the farmland,
while
the vicinity public park has flattened to build some holiday homes for these athletes.
Additionally
, a new car park was
also
built to fulfil the number of sports lovers’ cars.
Secondly
, a fishing village, including a trade market and an offshore fish farming area, was transformed into an ocean resort.
In particular
, the onshore market and nearby sports buildings were demolished and replaced with a chain of seaside apartments and an adjacent restaurant.
Moreover
, an adjacent hotel
were
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upgraded and expanded to meet tourist’s
accommodation
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accommodations
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,
while
a housing complex
were
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expanded to cater housing demands of surrounding citizens and employees.
Lastly
, tourists can partake in kayaking in
ocean
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the ocean
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after
removal
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offshore fishing cages and enjoy any beverages in nearby
coffe
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coffee
house
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houses
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after moving closer to the beach.
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