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Euthanasia, which is legal in a few countries of the world, has the increasing number of supporters. Some people think it should be legalized worldwide. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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People
 debate whether
euthanasia
 should be legal or not in the contemporary world. Personally, I agree that it is
ture
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true
 for
euthanasia
 to be a widespread program. It is undeniable that family
member
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members
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 will not accept the elder using
euthanasia
 even
they
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if they
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 want to do so. It is because the
People
 debate whether
euthanasia
 should be legal or not in modern
societ
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society
.
Euthanasia
 is a way
people
 who are
experencing
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experiencing
 pain relieve themselves. whether it's physical illness
,
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 or mental illness. Personally, I agree with the
people
that
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who
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 support legalizing
euthanasia
. I support
euthanasia
 because I think it's more painful to live for
people
 that want to die.
People
 who disagree with legalizing
euthanasia
 have a different opinion, they think it's a way
people
 use to avoid taking
responsbility
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responsibility
, to avoid feeling guilty. They believe it's
also
 not fair for the family members, they have to experience the pain of losing a loved one, and that they can't do anything about it
while
 they know it's happening. Legalizing
euthanasia
 could
also
However
,
people
 who agree with legalizing
euthanasia
holds
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 an opposite opinion. They think that it should be
ones
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one's
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 choice to determine his life,
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Work on developing a clear and logical structure for your essay. Ensure each paragraph flows smoothly and logically to the next.
coherence cohesion
Include a clear introduction and conclusion. The introduction should provide background on the topic and state your position, and the conclusion should summarize the main points and restate your position.
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Support your main points with specific and relevant examples and evidence. This will strengthen your argument and make your essay more convincing.
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Make sure every paragraph has a clear main idea and that you stay on topic throughout. This will help to convey your ideas more clearly and effectively.
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You have addressed both sides of the argument, which demonstrates a balanced understanding of the topic.
coherence cohesion
Your essay shows some understanding of the complexities surrounding euthanasia, which is commendable.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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