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Euthanasia, which is legal in a few countries of the world, has the increasing number of supporters. Some people think it should be legalized worldwide. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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People
 debate whether
euthanasia
 should be legal or not in modern society.
Euthanasia
 is a way
people
 who are experiencing pain relieve themselves. whether it's physical illness
,
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 or mental illness. Personally, I agree with the
people
 who support legalizing
euthanasia
. I support
euthanasia
 because I think it's more painful to live for
people
 that want to die.
People
 who disagree with legalizing
euthanasia
 have a different opinion, they think it's a way
people
 use to avoid taking responsibility, to avoid feeling guilty. They believe it's
also
 not fair for the family members, they have to experience the pain of losing a loved one, and that they can't do anything about it
while
 they know it's happening. Legalizing
euthanasia
 could
also
However
,
people
 who agree with legalizing
euthanasia
holds
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 an opposite opinion. They think that it should be one's choice to determine his life,
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Your essay does not fully address the task. To improve, ensure you discuss both sides of the argument comprehensively and provide a clear conclusion that states the extent of your agreement or disagreement.
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Provide more specific examples and evidence to support your points. This will strengthen your argument and make your essay more convincing.
coherence and cohesion
Enhance your logical structure by ensuring each paragraph has a clear main idea and flows logically to the next. You can use transitional phrases to improve coherence and cohesion.
coherence and cohesion
Ensure you have a clear conclusion that summarizes your main points and reinforces your position. This will help to create a more coherent and cohesive essay.
introduction
Your introduction is clear and provides a good understanding of the topic and your stance on it.

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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