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Band 4

Some people think that governments should spend money on railways. Others believe that there should be more investment into new roads. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

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believe
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 that
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seemed
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 to
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 on each other in the modern era
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while
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other
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others
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 believe that every
person
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person is
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 nowadays
more
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is more
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 and more independent.
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believe
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 that it is good for
people
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 to live by their own self and rely on their own
ability
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. It must be recognized that through the journey of getting
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 it is crucial for evidence to
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 each other’s background and knowledge. It is convenient that
any one
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anyone
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 will make a mistake in any field of their life.
There for
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, it is an idealistic conclusion to look into
other
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others
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 who meet similar
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issues
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 to identify the
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, why it happened, what is the result and how to deal with that issue in
most
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 effective and fastest way.
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Moreover
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 it is important to improve
individual
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an individual
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 own
ability
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 strongly by
ask to
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asking
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 or
seek
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seeking
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a
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support from each other like parents,
classmate
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classmates
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 or anyone who can offer
well
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good
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 knowledge or
transmission
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 useful information .
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 their certainly a chance to have any individual develop their own
communicate
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communication
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ability
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 and social
skill
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skills
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also
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 compare various
though
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thoughts
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,
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and feeling
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feeling
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feelings
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 with each other to
recognized
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recognise
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 what the strong pint and what they need to improve to complex themselves . It is not essential to perceive why
people
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 enjoy
in
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relying on each other in the modern era.
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, it cannot be undeniable that
individual’s
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an individual’s
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 own statement is one of the most crucial
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. It can be
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concluded
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 that spending more time and energy living and thinking by own statement will persuade
individual
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individuals
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 to achieve the
ability
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of
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to
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 keep attraction
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for
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 a long time period, increase
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people
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people's
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patient
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patience
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 and support anyone to have
deeper
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a deeper
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identify
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identity
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 in any issue.
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, living dependently
help
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people
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 recognize their
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ability
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abilities
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 and get
exact
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the exact
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 way to develop themselves in future
This
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believe
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 that it is essential for everyone to understand clearly their own
ability
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 and
limitation
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limitations
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.
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HOWEVER
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, it
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also
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is also
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 virtual for
people
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 to get useful
complaint
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complaints
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form
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from
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 each other. In conclusion, both
rely
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relying
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 on others
or
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and
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 living independently
both
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apply
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present
benefit
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benefits
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 to
individuals
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individuals'
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 appreciation.
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However
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However,
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 it is more beneficial for
people
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 to develop themselves by their own
ability
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 and self experiment .

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coherence cohesion
Your essay should have a clear and concise introduction that presents the topic and outlines the arguments. Also, make sure to have a well-defined conclusion that effectively summarizes the main points.
coherence cohesion
Work on the logical structure of your essay. Ensure that each paragraph flows smoothly into the next, and that the essay has a clear and logical progression of ideas.
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Enhance your main points with relevant and specific examples. Examples help illustrate your arguments and make them more convincing.
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Clarify your ideas and ensure that they are comprehensive. Avoid ambiguous sentences and make sure your points are clearly stated.
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The essay presents both sides of the argument, showing an attempt to address the prompt comprehensively.
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There is an effort to discuss multiple aspects of the topic, indicating a good understanding of the subject.
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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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