In the future all cars, buses and trucks will be driverless. The only travelling inside these vehicles will be passengers. Do you think the advantages of driverless vehicles outweigh the disadvantages?

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The advanced technologies of cars
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, and easily catch the attention
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tech-savvy
people
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. In the future, Some
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believe that
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vehicles
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likes
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cars,
busses
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buses
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and trucks will have the
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feature, fit
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only
passengers
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inside. As
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as I’m concerned,
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driverless
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vehicles
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might have
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slightly
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drawbacks compared to
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benefits.
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the first pilot of
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driverless
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vehicle
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will be not smooth and there must be some disadvantages,
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to
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the
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.
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, the
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vehicle
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is new and only
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people
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experienced how it works, so it is not
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if
people
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will not
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on
this
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types
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of
vehicle
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at
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the first time
either
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the system decision on the road.
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this
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, the
passengers
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also
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concerned about the
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safety functions in order to
sharing
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the road with normal
vehicles
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and
preventing
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the
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damage to the
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when it
gets
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crashed
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.
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,
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function will take down the driver, making many
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get fired from driver positions. I personally
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think
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that the
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vehicle
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is
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definitely revolutionized
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travelling forever and it has advantages more than the drawbacks mentioned above. The
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functions
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functions are
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suitable for everyone especially
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those who
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have disabilities and
who
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those who
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doesn’t
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don’t
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have driving
license
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because they can
also
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going
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out by themselves.
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, the
passengers
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also
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have more time,
living
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their personal
life
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. To illustrate, Bangkok is
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city with
chronical
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chronic
traffic congestion problems. If they use
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cars, the
passengers
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can
managing
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manage
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their life more
effective
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instead
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of spending time on driving.
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, the
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system is more stable,
trackingable
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trackable
and not frustrated by
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situation
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situations
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on
road
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the road
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. In conclusion,
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driverless
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vehicles
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will be
the
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beneficial technology, allowing
people
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to
travelling
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travel
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with stable and reliable
system
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systems
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and
fully
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safety functions.
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