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The pie chart show the reasons for immigrants to a European country in 2009 and reasons for immigrants from a European country in 2009. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the mein features and make comparisons where relevant.

The pie chart show the reasons for immigrants to a European country in 2009 and reasons for immigrants from a European country in 2009. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the mein features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The charts compare why
people
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 immigrate to a
European
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country
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 and immigrate from the
country
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 in terms of six different reasons in 2009.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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 most
people
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 came to a
European
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country
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 to accompany or family and most
people
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 left the
country
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 to work. The least
immigrants
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 came and left the
country
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 without any reason. In 2009, the largest
proportion
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 of
immigrants
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 came to a
European
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country
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 because of family or accompany, which represented 25% of the total
immigrants
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. The number of
immigrants
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 who came for
the
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 definite
job
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, was quite lower than that, at 23%. The figures for looking
job
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 and other reasons were the same as those for studying, at 15%. The smallest
proportion
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 of
people
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 immigrate to the
country
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 without any reason. In 2009, the largest
proportion
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 of
people
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 left a
European
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country
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due to
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 definite jobs, which represented 38% of the total
immigrants
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. The indicator of other reasons for leaving was considerably lower than that, at 23%. The figures for family, looking for a
job
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 and studying were relatively similar, at 15 for family, 13% for looking for a
job
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 and 7% for studying. The smallest
proportion
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 of
immigrants
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 left the
country
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 without any reason, at 4%.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words people, european, country, immigrants, proportion, job with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "represented" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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