The diagram gives information about the process of making carbonated drinks.

The diagram gives information about the process of making carbonated drinks.
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The diagram shows the procedure process of carbonated beverages.
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, there are various stages in the production of beverage, from making ideal mineral water to blending it with carbonated dioxide, colouring and flavour. In the initial process, raw water stored in large warehouses is pumped through a pipe into a room to be filtered, after which some softener substances and other types of chemicals are added in order to remove some minerals in the beverage.
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is followed by, the softenered drink pumped into a large chamber to be heated by means of electric heaters to extract the amount of vapourised steam,
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the other unwanted minerals are clumped. In the following procedure, the condensing procedure
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through a cooling pipe and the condensed softened water is dissolved with an equivalent certain amount of carbon dioxide in a high-pressure tank to make a carbonated drink. The process continues with the most important stage is blending the mixture, which includes the produced carbonated beverage with a certain volume of colouring, syrup, and flavouring.
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, the substances are filtered and filled into bottles and cans, before packaging and transported into supermarkets by trucks.
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