The way many people interact with each other nowadays has dramatically changed because of technology. In what way has technology affected types of human relation ship? Has this been a positive or negative development?

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It is undeniable that advanced
technology
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are
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growing unstoppable, supporting
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people
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lives. It is considered by many that
technology
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causes changes
of
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interaction between
people
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. As far as I’m concerned,
technology
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do
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take a vital role and affects
to
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people
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relationship
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in many aspects both positive and negative effects.
To begin
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with,
technology
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affects
to
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many types of human
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relationship
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. Modern technologies
such
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as
smartphone
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,
laptop
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and the internet have been playing an important role in personal life, education and business.
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, many
people
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use social
network
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like Instagram and WhatsApp to keep in touch with their family and friends, to make new friends who
shar
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the same interests and to find a lover.
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,
students
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can learn from anywhere via the electrical devices that can access the internet. Internet services help
students
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exchange,
explore
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and explore

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the
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knowledge wider either
search
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for information conveniently or even participating in
the
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online classes across the country.
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, during the COVID-19 outbreak in 2019, the
governments
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forced all
students
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who
infected
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stayed
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at home, yet
students
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can
joined
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the
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classes using meeting applications like Google Meets.
Finally
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,
technology
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has been improving in business as well
especially
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, especially

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in
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logistic
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business. Back in the day, it might
took
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a week to
got
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a parcel or a letter from
the
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shop in
different
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country, but now smartphones allow
people
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to order
the
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goods from another side of the world online, cashless, trackable and faster than the traditional way. I personally think that
these
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this technology
these technologies

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technology
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can
be
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both positive and negative effects
to
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on

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who
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use them, On the one hand, these
development
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can be extremely beneficial. It can be seen that
people
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are able to interact promptly and conveniently
by
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calls, messages and video calls, making
people
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can
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keep in touch and keep close
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relationship
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relationships

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with their family, friends and
colleague
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even though they do not have
physically
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conversation
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conversations

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. With these
beneficial
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,
technology
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not only
gain
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relationship
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relationships

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in work but
also
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in social contexts.
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,
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can cause negative
influence
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such
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as isolating
people
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and less
interact
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in real life. To illustrate,
people
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who stay alone for a long time might have an awkward feeling
of
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about

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having physical
conversation
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conversations

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with
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in
real
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world
while
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they can do better in
virtual
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the virtual
a virtual

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world. In conclusion, it is true that the advance of
technology
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brings
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certainly revolutionized communication between
people
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, but at the same
time
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it should be noted that not all of the outcomes of the
revolutionary
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have been positive.
Therefore
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, it is important to raise awareness to
public
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that actual communication is far
important
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more important

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that
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than

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virtual interaction and even better in maintaining the
relationship
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between
people
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Strengthen your task achievement by addressing all parts of the prompt explicitly. The essay needs to more clearly discuss both positive and negative sides of the effect of technology on human relationships.
coherence cohesion
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grammar
Work on grammar and sentence structure. Avoid common errors like subject-verb agreement (e.g., "technology are growing", "technology do take"). Using varied sentence structures will enhance readability.
coherence cohesion
The introduction and conclusion are well-placed and contribute meaningfully to the essay.
task achievement
You provided relevant examples, including from personal experience and current events like the COVID-19 pandemic.
task achievement
The essay addresses both positive and negative effects of technology on human relationships, showing a balanced perspective.

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