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This diagrams show a structure that is used to generate electricity from wave power.

This diagrams show a structure that is used to generate electricity from wave power.
The illustrations present the process of
wave
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power
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electricity
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 production.
Overall
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, the
wave
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 is clearly important to the process. The
power
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station
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 must be strictly
constrcuted
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constructed
 at the cliff or the
sea
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 wall. Interestingly, the
sea
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 water is not used to produce
the
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electricity
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.
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the structure of the
wave
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power
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station
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 is built by the cliff or the
sea
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 wall in order to gain most of the air which is trapped and used for
turninbg
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turning
 the turbines when the
wave
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 hits the structure wall of the chamber. The chamber (a part of the
station
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) is built in the
sea
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 to let the
wave
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comes
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 in and out.
Next,
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the air leaving the chamber travels up the structure to turn the turbine which always
turn
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 at the same
dirtection
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direction
, and
this
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 is where the
electricity
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 is generated.
Also
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, some air is
then
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relased
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released
 out of the
colum
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column
 into the higher level of the atmosphere. It is interesting that the
sea
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 water is in fact not
the
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part of the production process. In conclusion,
this
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 sort of
renewabel
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renewable
power
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 relies on the
geographoical
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geographical
 factor as the stronger the
wave
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 is, the more
electricity
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 is produced
although
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this
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 could lead to
the
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a
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 change
of
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in
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 the
contry's
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country's
 geographical coast where the coast is used as the site of the
wave
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power
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station
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.

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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words wave, power, electricity, station, sea with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "wave" was used 7 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Wave power
  • Offshore
  • Kinetic energy
  • Renewable energy
  • Buoy
  • Turbine
  • Generator
  • Carbon footprint
  • Ecosystems
  • Sustainability
  • Energy portfolio
  • Scalability
  • Power grid
  • Marine environment
  • Economic viability
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