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The graph below gives information from 1 2008 report about the consumption of energy in the USA with projections from 1980 until 2030.

The graph below gives information from 1 2008 report about the consumption of energy in the USA with projections from 1980 until 2030.
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The graph illustrates information from the 12008 report about the consumption of
energy
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 in the
USA
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 with projections between 1986 and 2030
Overall
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, the number of
energy
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 used for six certain projections in the
USA
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 increased except for Hydropower. Remarkably, the figures for
energy
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 from petrol and oil used the most during the
period
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 shown. Starting, In 1980, the majority of
energy
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 consumed in the
USA
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 was petrol and oil, with 35
quadrillion
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units
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 and it will rise to over 45
quadrillion
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units
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 by the end of the
period
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. Opposite, there were only about three
quadrillion
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units
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 in 1980, after that, the quantity of
energy
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 from hydropower consumption in the
USA
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 fluctuated over the next 30 years, before dropping to about two
quadrillion
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units
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 in 2010.
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,
this
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 number will remain until 2030. The figures for
energy
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 from coal and natural gas used in the
USA
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 in the first
period
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 were about 17
quadrillion
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units
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 and 20
quadrillion
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units
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, respectively. Both of the two figures fluctuated and rose to about 25
quadrillion
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units
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 in 2015.
At the end
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 of the
period
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, the figure for coal will grow to 30
quadrillion
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while
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 the figure for natural gas will be unchanged. The numbers of
energy
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 from nuclear and solar/wind consumed in the
USA
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 were similar, at only three
quadrillion
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units
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 in 1980 and they will witness a slight increase to about six
quadrillion
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units
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 of
energy
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 from nuclear and five
quadrillion
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units
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 of
energy
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 from solar/wind.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 75%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words energy, usa, period, quadrillion, units with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fluctuated" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 6 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Energy consumption
  • Renewable resources
  • Non-renewable resources
  • Fossil fuels
  • Nuclear power
  • Hydroelectric power
  • Solar energy
  • Wind energy
  • Biomass
  • Consumption patterns
  • Technological advancements
  • Energy efficiency
  • Sustainable development
  • Carbon footprint
  • Energy policy
  • Projections
  • Decade
  • Significant shifts
  • Economic factors
  • Environmental impact
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